The Yes Guy

Jimmy's the poor one--his dad's an alcoholic industrial worker. Mike's dad is a doctor, and they are wealthy. I think that's more clear later on. Thanks for the encouragement. I ...

While I hate to be "that guy" and post my work after the bare minimum of 2 reviews (I have 3!), I'm afraid if I don't do it now I'll ...

My main problem was with the phrasing of your descriptions. I caught at least 3 or 4 that began with "it was like" or some variation of that. To me, ...

I've been gone for almost a year. Something brought me back, though, and here I am.

And of course the military had to get their little bit, finding a way to make weapons better somehow. In this attempt, the SM12 was created, the Smart Missile, Version ...

I wrote 20 odd pages about anthropomorphic crayfish in 2nd grade and some of the summer. That was my first real writing experience.

I'm about to start The Power and the Glory by Graham Greene, hopefully it won't be too religious for my liking.

I hate when I see something like "laughed grimly" or "smiled grimly". I mean, it just makes the character so badass, doesn't it? Oh wait, no.

The best first person narrative I've ever read is All the Kings Men. In that book, the physical appearance of the character is rather vague, although some is revealed throughout. ...

On the other hand, I enjoyed the first few sentences more than any others from the story. It seemed as the story progressed, the writing style grew more rushed, more ...

First post: Well, I have enjoyed writing for as long as I have been able to do so. Unfortunately, I seem to lack the ability to finish a story. Hopefully ...